03 May

house of bonesPhoto copyright Kent Bonham

She had trailed her quarry carefully through the raucous throngs, but in a moment of distraction he had slipped from sight. Estrella was terrified—her safety depended on shadowing his every move. Anxiously, she scanned the crowd from the cover of a building that also seemed masked for Carnival. Her costume camouflaged her among the revelers; could he still find her?

Familiar cologne penetrated her fear just as a strong arm snaked around her waist. Estrella struggled mightily in the vise-like grip, loosing herself just enough to twist and throw her arms around her captor’s neck.

“Papá, there you are!”

After a couple weeks off, it feels good to be back in the swing of Friday Fictioneers, trying to capture a story inspired by the week’s photo prompt in only 100 words!


Posts I commented on today:
A Roof with a View (anelephantcant)  new blog of the day
3 May 2013 (Rochelle Wisoff-Fields–Addicted to Purple)
Handling Rejection (castelsarrasin)


Posted by on May 3, 2013 in Challenges, Fiction



13 responses to “Quarry

  1. AnElephantCant

    May 3, 2013 at 1:11 PM

    Clever tale, nicely done.
    But AnElephantCant find your comment on his post. Do you have a different name?

    • dreaminofobx

      May 3, 2013 at 2:21 PM

      Thank you for stopping by! I double checked to be sure I hadn’t closed out my comment on your post without publishing it, and it is there under dreaminofobx.

  2. Sandra

    May 3, 2013 at 2:02 PM

    Phew! The relief of it…. Nice work.

  3. troy P.

    May 3, 2013 at 2:23 PM

    Hitting the 100 word mark was difficult with this one, wasn’t it? Nicely done with yours!

  4. Christopher Schuck

    May 3, 2013 at 4:41 PM

    Cute! That was a really fun twist. Filled with suspense but having a happy ending, and of course being written well, always makes a great story.

  5. Anne Orchard

    May 3, 2013 at 7:42 PM

    That’s a great ending. You built up the tension and then it all turned loving.

  6. Janet domino

    May 3, 2013 at 8:25 PM

    Good job!

  7. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

    May 3, 2013 at 9:53 PM

    Dear Michelle,
    A stellar story for sure. 😉 I love the way you misled me through the crowd and then made me grin.

  8. Lora Mitchell

    May 4, 2013 at 7:36 AM

    I walked thru the fear with her…ah…relief .. Papa’s here. Well done.

  9. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    May 4, 2013 at 2:16 PM

    A deceiveing your reader is the best one, I love it. Though it could still be sinister in yet a way…

  10. sustainabilitea

    May 4, 2013 at 3:17 PM

    I enjoyed the suspense and then the letting-go of it.


  11. neenslewy

    May 5, 2013 at 11:54 AM

    I agree with Bjorn, I am left with that feeling that something is about to happen and all is not as rosy as it seems!

  12. patrickprinsloo

    May 5, 2013 at 1:49 PM

    I liked this. You had me panicking for a while, but then all is okay.


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