10 Mar

100_1262In rage and disbelief, I followed them, my Nikon capturing irrefutable proof for my client. A stone’s throw ahead, the faithless husband paused and passionately claimed my wife’s willing mouth with his own.

Ever a glutton for punishment, I’m pushing the minimalist limits by accepting Trifecta‘s weekend challenge, the Trifextra for week 58. The instructions were simple…write a 33-word story featuring the word “stone,” using any definition of the word. Constructive feedback is appreciated!


Posted by on March 10, 2013 in Fiction, Sunday Best



12 responses to “Stone

  1. Latitudes of a Day

    March 10, 2013 at 6:45 PM

    Oh my! This is nice, but I’m confused. Is the photographer the client too?

    • dreaminofobx

      March 10, 2013 at 7:40 PM

      No, the male photographer (private investigator) has a female client, but their spouses are involved with each other. At least that’s what I intended!

      • Latitudes of a Day

        March 10, 2013 at 8:04 PM

        Thanks for the insight. I still like the writing.

  2. atrm61

    March 10, 2013 at 7:33 PM

    This is so cool-one of my favs :-)Loved the twist-definitely did not expect it & was wondering why he is angry when he is just doing it for his client-what a painful revelation!Cool pic too.An excellent piece of writing:-)

    • dreaminofobx

      March 10, 2013 at 7:42 PM

      Thank you! I’m glad you understood the twist…it was a challenge to incorporate that in so few words.

      • atrm61

        March 10, 2013 at 8:49 PM

        Yes,it is always difficult with only 33 words,but you made it very clear with such few words-excellent:-)loved it!

  3. robbowrites

    March 10, 2013 at 11:15 PM

    Very clever, I love this!

  4. jannatwrites

    March 11, 2013 at 12:06 AM

    I had to read it a couple times to get the twist…and then, OH MY! Talk about a personal investment in a job. Of course, my mind can’t leave it alone, and I’m curious as to whether he knew his wife was involved with the client’s husband when he agreed to take the job 🙂

  5. Draug419

    March 11, 2013 at 1:20 AM

    What a tangled tale of love. Great little twist!

  6. trifectawriting

    March 11, 2013 at 5:18 AM

    Wicked twist.

  7. whimsygizmo

    March 11, 2013 at 12:38 PM

    Oh, my. NICE. That’s a whole lot to have captured with 33 words. Excellent twist. And that verb “claimed” is so strong. Awesome job!

  8. KymmInBarcelona

    March 11, 2013 at 1:22 PM

    lol Great one!


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