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10 Mar

100_1262In rage and disbelief, I followed them, my Nikon capturing irrefutable proof for my client. A stone’s throw ahead, the faithless husband paused and passionately claimed my wife’s willing mouth with his own.

Ever a glutton for punishment, I’m pushing the minimalist limits by accepting Trifecta‘s weekend challenge, the Trifextra for week 58. The instructions were simple…write a 33-word story featuring the word “stone,” using any definition of the word. Constructive feedback is appreciated!

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Posted by on March 10, 2013 in Fiction, Sunday Best

 

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12 responses to “Stone

  1. Latitudes of a Day

    March 10, 2013 at 6:45 PM

    Oh my! This is nice, but I’m confused. Is the photographer the client too?

     
    • dreaminofobx

      March 10, 2013 at 7:40 PM

      No, the male photographer (private investigator) has a female client, but their spouses are involved with each other. At least that’s what I intended!

       
      • Latitudes of a Day

        March 10, 2013 at 8:04 PM

        Thanks for the insight. I still like the writing.

         
  2. atrm61

    March 10, 2013 at 7:33 PM

    This is so cool-one of my favs :-)Loved the twist-definitely did not expect it & was wondering why he is angry when he is just doing it for his client-what a painful revelation!Cool pic too.An excellent piece of writing:-)

     
    • dreaminofobx

      March 10, 2013 at 7:42 PM

      Thank you! I’m glad you understood the twist…it was a challenge to incorporate that in so few words.

       
      • atrm61

        March 10, 2013 at 8:49 PM

        Yes,it is always difficult with only 33 words,but you made it very clear with such few words-excellent:-)loved it!

         
  3. robbowrites

    March 10, 2013 at 11:15 PM

    Very clever, I love this!

     
  4. jannatwrites

    March 11, 2013 at 12:06 AM

    I had to read it a couple times to get the twist…and then, OH MY! Talk about a personal investment in a job. Of course, my mind can’t leave it alone, and I’m curious as to whether he knew his wife was involved with the client’s husband when he agreed to take the job 🙂

     
  5. Draug419

    March 11, 2013 at 1:20 AM

    What a tangled tale of love. Great little twist!

     
  6. trifectawriting

    March 11, 2013 at 5:18 AM

    Wicked twist.

     
  7. whimsygizmo

    March 11, 2013 at 12:38 PM

    Oh, my. NICE. That’s a whole lot to have captured with 33 words. Excellent twist. And that verb “claimed” is so strong. Awesome job!

     
  8. KymmInBarcelona

    March 11, 2013 at 1:22 PM

    lol Great one!

     

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