In rage and disbelief, I followed them, my Nikon capturing irrefutable proof for my client. A stone’s throw ahead, the faithless husband paused and passionately claimed my wife’s willing mouth with his own.
Ever a glutton for punishment, I’m pushing the minimalist limits by accepting Trifecta‘s weekend challenge, the Trifextra for week 58. The instructions were simple…write a 33-word story featuring the word “stone,” using any definition of the word. Constructive feedback is appreciated!
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Latitudes of a Day
March 10, 2013 at 6:45 PM
Oh my! This is nice, but I’m confused. Is the photographer the client too?
dreaminofobx
March 10, 2013 at 7:40 PM
No, the male photographer (private investigator) has a female client, but their spouses are involved with each other. At least that’s what I intended!
Latitudes of a Day
March 10, 2013 at 8:04 PM
Thanks for the insight. I still like the writing.
atrm61
March 10, 2013 at 7:33 PM
This is so cool-one of my favs :-)Loved the twist-definitely did not expect it & was wondering why he is angry when he is just doing it for his client-what a painful revelation!Cool pic too.An excellent piece of writing:-)
dreaminofobx
March 10, 2013 at 7:42 PM
Thank you! I’m glad you understood the twist…it was a challenge to incorporate that in so few words.
atrm61
March 10, 2013 at 8:49 PM
Yes,it is always difficult with only 33 words,but you made it very clear with such few words-excellent:-)loved it!
robbowrites
March 10, 2013 at 11:15 PM
Very clever, I love this!
jannatwrites
March 11, 2013 at 12:06 AM
I had to read it a couple times to get the twist…and then, OH MY! Talk about a personal investment in a job. Of course, my mind can’t leave it alone, and I’m curious as to whether he knew his wife was involved with the client’s husband when he agreed to take the job 🙂
Draug419
March 11, 2013 at 1:20 AM
What a tangled tale of love. Great little twist!
trifectawriting
March 11, 2013 at 5:18 AM
Wicked twist.
whimsygizmo
March 11, 2013 at 12:38 PM
Oh, my. NICE. That’s a whole lot to have captured with 33 words. Excellent twist. And that verb “claimed” is so strong. Awesome job!
KymmInBarcelona
March 11, 2013 at 1:22 PM
lol Great one!