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To soothe the savage beast

11 Oct

amphitheaterPhoto copyright Sandra Crook

In the darkness of the wings, Marcellus was nearly swept up as the tsunami of the third grade chorus rushed offstage, trailing nervous energy and holiday anticipation in its wake. Tugging one final time at his tie, the young soloist moved toward his center-stage mark. Stabbed by the spotlight as the curtain rose, Marcellus felt his stomach churn violently and sucked in a breath, certain his chicken nuggets were about to make an encore appearance. Instead, the purest, clearest notes spilled from his lips, immediately stilling fidgety parents impatient to get home before the roads iced over. ”O holy night…”

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Honestly, I’m not trying to rush the season in this little story for Friday Fictioneers, but the lone figure on the “stage” at L’Amphitheatre des Trois Gauls (Lyon, France) in Sandra’s photo this week made me think of elementary school Christmas pageants.

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Posted by on October 11, 2013 in Challenges, Fiction

 

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5 responses to “To soothe the savage beast

  1. sustainabilitea

    October 13, 2013 at 11:28 PM

    I love this line: ” tsunami of the third grade chorus.” I can see the tsunami. Really well done all throughout and I really liked the last line. I could feel them all settling and feeling the Christmas joy.

    janet

     
  2. rochellewisoff

    October 14, 2013 at 4:52 AM

    Dear Michelle,

    My favorite line was “certain his chicken nuggets were about to make an encore…” priceless. How many of those concerts have I been to as a parent? You captured the anxiety on both sides of the familial fence. This is one of my favorites this week. Well done.

    shalom,

    Rochelle

     
  3. Douglas Macilroy

    October 14, 2013 at 4:54 AM

    Dear Michelle,

    The encore of the nuggets was a cheap thrill, and I laughed heartily at that, but nothing holds a candle to your use of words to paint such a wonderful scene that evoked so many emotions in me. A very special piece of writing.

    Aloha,

    Doug

     
  4. lingeringvisions by Dawn

    October 14, 2013 at 6:49 AM

    Awwww…what a sweet story.

     
  5. Sandra

    October 15, 2013 at 1:58 AM

    Lovely! It’s a shame this came late in the proceedings, as it might not get all the reads it deserves. Well done.

     

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