By dawn’s early light

19 Jul


Slowly, the sun takes center stage, rising from the inky water where it has slumbered overnight. A ring of light herds stars westward and gilds a stranger’s face on the pillow beside me.


The above is my entry for this weekend’s Trifextra: Week Seventy-Seven challenge.  They supplied three words (ring, stage, water) and asked us to contribute another thirty of our own, making a grand total of thirty-three words. 



Posted by on July 19, 2013 in Challenges, Fiction



18 responses to “By dawn’s early light

  1. Ashley K.

    July 19, 2013 at 10:48 PM

    Love this. Very sweet.

  2. Ivy (Mommy Dourest)

    July 20, 2013 at 2:08 AM

    I hope the stranger looks as appealing in daylight as he/she must have last night! 🙂

    Very nice piece. Didn’t expect it to go in that direction.

    • dreaminofobx

      July 20, 2013 at 7:46 PM

      You think there may have been beer goggles? 😉

  3. Draug419

    July 20, 2013 at 3:33 AM

    Ooo, I like this one a lot. Awesome job.

  4. Yve Chairez (@YveChairez)

    July 20, 2013 at 4:29 AM

    Wonderful…! Didn’t expect it to go there. Expected it to be just a descriptive piece about a sunrise… But, a stranger in bed! How exciting!

    • dreaminofobx

      July 20, 2013 at 7:43 PM

      I’m glad I could accomplish the misdirect in the space available!

  5. jannatwrites

    July 20, 2013 at 6:15 AM

    Whoa, that last part was unexpected. I was into the beautiful description of sunrise, and then the stranger’s face came into it. There’s more of a story here!

    • dreaminofobx

      July 20, 2013 at 7:42 PM

      Yay! I was going for unexpected…it’s always a challenge to incorporate a twist in so few words. 🙂

  6. barbara

    July 21, 2013 at 6:32 AM

    waking up next to a stranger? Uh-oh . . . . I do like the picture and the description of the sunrise. 🙂

  7. Valerie

    July 21, 2013 at 3:40 PM

    This is gorgeous!

  8. shreyakashyap

    July 21, 2013 at 3:57 PM

    wonderful ! wow ! such a beautiful morning !

  9. Jennifer Dillon

    July 21, 2013 at 5:33 PM

    oooo. ‘gilds’ nice!

  10. trifectawriting

    July 21, 2013 at 7:44 PM

    Quite evocative! And a tad erotic, too. Love it. Thanks for linking up!

  11. debseeman

    July 21, 2013 at 8:38 PM

    I just love love LOVE the first sentence. Beautiful!

  12. mairzeebp

    July 21, 2013 at 8:56 PM

    This is so pretty. Love the use of gilds. Thank you for linking up! ~Mary Beth

  13. shawnbrucepruett

    July 21, 2013 at 9:05 PM

    A sexy tale of a one-nighter !


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