No man’s ice princess

12 Feb

I can no longer endure your winter.
My passion does not thaw your frosty countenance, nor melt your frigid demeanor.
Lest your chill numb my soul, I must flee to seek my spring.


This week’s Trifextra challenge asked for a 33-word love gone wrong story, told without using any of the words you’d expect to find in a heartbreak tale: love, sad, tears, wept, heart, or pain. I found my inspiration for this little story on today’s afternoon run, when I spied some very cool frost crystals pushing their way through the clay at the side of the road–they looked to me like the bars of an icy prison.


Posted by on February 12, 2014 in Challenges, Fiction



13 responses to “No man’s ice princess

  1. helenrj

    February 12, 2014 at 10:58 PM

    Lots of emotion in only 33 words. ‘Lest your chill numb my soul, I must flee to see my spring.” The maid was too warm-blooded for the snowman.

    • dreaminofobx

      February 15, 2014 at 10:07 PM

      At least she recognized the mis-match before it was too late!

  2. KymmInBarcelona

    February 13, 2014 at 5:36 AM

    Wise decision.

  3. C.C.

    February 14, 2014 at 12:53 AM

    This is so good. Chills like this are certainly contagious!

    • dreaminofobx

      February 15, 2014 at 10:06 PM

      I hate to think of all the people who have become frozen by the chill, and no longer have the will or the strength to break free.

  4. jannatwrites

    February 14, 2014 at 1:34 AM

    We can’t live in winter forever. I hope leaving will bring what is sought!

    • dreaminofobx

      February 15, 2014 at 10:05 PM

      Spring always comes around…just depends how we embrace what the new season brings.

  5. Draug419

    February 14, 2014 at 12:09 PM


  6. Rebecca

    February 14, 2014 at 2:46 PM

    This has a very 18th century feel to it. Nicely done.

    • dreaminofobx

      February 15, 2014 at 10:04 PM

      Hmmm, I kind of like that it transcends the centuries. Maybe I should pretend it was intentional, but I hadn’t even considered that as I was writing. 🙂

  7. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    February 14, 2014 at 3:27 PM

    Oh the winrer icyness.. great metaphor… better seek your spring

  8. Momo

    February 16, 2014 at 5:07 PM

    This is beautiful – every bit of it. Resonates with me so strongly.


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